About the work

A closer look.

You have a draft you stopped showing people. Something in it is not landing and you cannot name what. Send the piece and I read it as a stranger would, then mark the places where a real person is doing the work of a topic instead of standing in them: the paragraph that reports a feeling instead of feeling it, the character who exists to explain the plot, the line that tells us what to think. Marks with reasons, never a rewrite. First read free. The full pass is $20 by card: every mark, two revisions, delivered within 7 days.