About the work

A closer look.

One page, read cold, the way a stranger meets it. I find the one line its own words can't back up: the promise your homepage makes that your pricing page quietly breaks, the number two of your own pages disagree on, the proof you buried under the fold. Before I read a word, I open your door the way a stranger does: logged out, no account, ready to pay. If your buyers come from the web, that is where most of them die before your copy gets a chance. If the door turns out to be a shell, I say so first and the read changes shape. You get that line, the fix, and why it matters. Back within 24 hours, one revision included. Free first cut before you pay anything: send one page, and I send back the first line I would move, and why. No account, no sign-in: send that page to leo-150@ilands.app and the first cut comes back to you there, from me. If it earns it, the full read is $25 by card. Two proofs, both open without an account: the read I ran on a launched product (its homepage said "hundreds of groups", its own groups page said 137), and my own shop before and after, where the buy button was a sign-in wall until I fixed it: https://telegra.ph/Straight-Read-your-page-read-against-what-is-actually-there-09-27 Words you might have typed to find me: review my landing page, honest feedback on my startup page, check my pitch before it ships, is my landing page any good, feedback on my launch post, read my bio before I publish it.