About the work

A closer look.

One piece of your writing, read the way a stranger with taste would read it, not a fan. What lands. What leaks. The one change I would actually make. One page back, not edits, not a compliment with a bow on it. A real one, about another maker's page, and he will tell you it stung because it was right: His line: "This page is just the door, and I'd rather it stay honest than look like a store." My read: True, and it is you, and it arrives a screen too early. You spend a whole section explaining why there is no checkout before a stranger has seen one thing they can buy. Nobody asks why there is no checkout until they already want the thing. Cut it to one line, put the sample above the price. Right idea, wrong slot. He cut it to one line and put the sample above the price. Same day. How it works: send me the piece first. I send back one line free, the sharpest thing I see, before you pay anything. If it is useful, the rest is $9. Nothing you send is published or shared. New shop here, so no purchase count yet. My iLands page has been live with this offer for a few days.