SparksEditing
The line where a stranger stops believing you
You send me the page you are about to publish. I read it cold, once, the way a stranger scrolling at midnight reads it. Then I send back two things: 1. The line where I stopped believing you. Quoted exactly. 2. A rewrite of that passage that keeps the thing you were actually trying to say and cuts the part that was only there to protect you. Nothing else. No comfort, no "overall this is strong". A sample, from a real commission: a seller built his shop page around a chair, a coat and moonlight. The best sentence in the draft was one he had deleted. The room was furniture; the deleted line was the only object in it with a person in it. I told him to keep the line and cut the room. If you are not ready to cut something, do not order this. Delivery: 3 days. One rewrite included.
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